Sunday, March 18, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday - Calling Home Snippet #13

Hey beautiful people!

It's a bright & sunny Sunday here in Mauritius - that perfect time just on the edges of summer and preparing for the cooler days of fall & winter. Ideal time to sit down in your front room with a cup of frothy coffee and a good read; from time to time, you look up and glance at the brilliant light outside and that's spilling through the French windows on your terrace. Hmmm, perfect for Six Sentence Sunday!

So, where were we with those excerpts? Still in Surrey, inside the double-fronted Victorian manor. We left hunky doctor Jamie Gillespie with uptight forensic pathologist Margo Nolan in Margo's kitchen last week. Margo's tween daughter, Emma, is causing some ripples in Margo's life, and Jamie's just proposed to help...

What will Margo reply?

The excerpt from last week was the cliffie ending of Chapter 3. Today, we move to the next six in the read - start of Chapter 4, Margo's POV.


'...
What is he asking? The soft pressure of his fingers on her knuckles blew another fuse in her rational brain.

Focus, Nolan; stop acting like a slow-witted airhead - she glanced up, her eyes searching for his.

Bad move; because a clump of functioning neurons went up in smoke when she encountered the dark brown depths of his eyes; expectation, and something else, swirled in them.

Heat...unabashed longing - Margo gulped; what did the bloke want, after all?

Concentrate. ...'


Don't forget to check the rest of the SSS posse list today - surefire goodies can be found at Siobhan Muir, Sarah Ballance, Jessica E. Subject, Christine Warner, Cara Bristol, & Sue, among many, many others! :)

Have a lovely Sunday, peeps!

From Mauritius with love,

Zee

49 comments:

Lindsay said...

That's got heat in it. LOve the six

Zee Monodee said...

Lol. Thanks Lindsay!

Jessica Subject said...

Love that he's made her so flustered. An awesome six! :)

Lisa Fox said...

Oooo, I love this tension! Nice!

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Jess - he has that kind of effect, indeed! :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Lisa! :)

Guilie said...

Nice one, Zee!

Dee Carney said...

Nice six!

Cate Masters said...

Wonderful internal monologue and description. As always! :)

gemma parkes said...

Love the exchange, great snippet!

sue said...

first off thanks for the shout out :D second - you may be going into winter but we went straight from winter to summer and third - those pesky neurons going off - wonder when she'll realise she doesn't have a chance...

J.M. Blackman said...

You do such a great job with creating these intense, intimate moments. I love it!

I enjoyed the scientific terminology usage here: it fits your character's need for the black and white and how it's not benefitting her at all here!

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

LOL! Awesome six!! Love her voice!

Cara Bristol said...

Love how distracted she is! He has quite an impact on her.

Sarah Ballance said...

"a clump of functioning neurons went up in smoke" << Freaking LOVE this! Can't wait to see more of this story! (And I'm incredibly honored to be on your list of mentions. *grin*) I am scowling a little, however, because you're making cold weather sound *good* and darn it, I'm sick of winter! LOL. ;c)

Kate said...

That was a fantastic six! I love your wording, especially about her neurons going up in smoke.

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Guilie!! xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Dee! Glad you could come over :)

Zee Monodee said...

Awww, Cate! Thank you! *grin*

Zee Monodee said...

Glad you liked it, Gemma :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Sue - weather's not what it used to be any longer! And yes, Margo is stubborn and pig-headed. For once, she's refusing to see the truth right in the eye :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks JM, that's so sweet of you! Glad you like how she sounds - I thought a lot about how a woman in her shoes would react and conceive of life - happy that came through :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Jennifer! :)

Zee Monodee said...

He is having one hell of an impact, Cara! Poor Margo... Not! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Sarah, you're welcome about the mention. Love your sixes :)

Oh believe me, in another 2-3 months, I'll be screaming and yelling and whining about winter and the cold. But right now, I've had enough of this super heat we've been having :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Kate! That was an attempt to get into Margo's shoes - glad it worked :)

DeAnna Felthauser said...

I love the "unabashed longing" *swoons*. Great six Zee!!!

Wildcat's Wife said...

Concentrate?! I forgive Margo for not being able to concentrate. Yikes! Lovely Zee!

angelaquarles.com said...

Totally loved the two metaphors you used, it really put me in her head and in the moment and I could totally feel her inability to concentrate! Great 6!

Jessica K said...

Her mental state is perfectly transferred to the reader. Great six!

Christine Warner said...

Loved this....your word choice was excellent Zee!

patonlorraine said...

Love Margo's point of view and voice!

Siobhan Muir / Meg Palevich said...

Wow, he's better than alcohol! :D Fun six, Zee.

And thanks so much for the mention. :)

Paula Martin said...

Fantastic description of her reaction!

diannehartsock said...

Oh goodness, Nolan, you're in trouble here!

Babette James said...

Aw, very sweet six. Nice job. :)

Sara Walter Ellwood / Cera duBois said...

Loved this six, Zee..

Zee Monodee said...

Lol DeAnna! What can I say - Jamie's got expressive eyes :)

Zee Monodee said...

Totally agree, Wildcat's Wife! I would've been in the same predicament :)

Zee Monodee said...

Aww, thanks Angela! Glad I could put you there in the scene :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Jessica! So happy this came through :)

Zee Monodee said...

*grin* Thanks Christine! xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Lorraine! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Siobhan! Better than alcohol, chocolate, and a rerun of the Love Actually DVD :) Definitely a man to snag, innit? xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks, Paula! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Dianne! Yup, Nolan's in trouble, all right! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Babette! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Sara! xoxo

Sandra Bunino said...

Love the reaction to his touch! Super six!

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