Sunday, December 18, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - Calling Home Snippet #3

Hey beautiful people

December! Wow - the blog's been a succession of hit & miss this month, but I couldn't let Sunday pass by and not post for Six Sentence Sunday. Guess that gets addictive - to have a snippet up, and to have the many visits and comments! Thanks so much to everyone who comes over to read my excerpts, and double thanks to all who leave me comments - I've already said this, but will say it again: you totally brighten my week with your words. :)

So, this week we're back in the surgery of country doctor Jamie Gillespie, the hero from Calling Home. Remember - Margo's daughter has been taken sick to the doctor's practice, and Margo is there to pick the girl up at the end of the day (more like the evening!). She and the young doctor butt heads, when she doesn't recognise him and thinks he's a pervert trying to get close to her little girl!

But the suspicions allayed, and then Margo has another reason to squirm - Jamie Gillespie is a handsome, intense young man who brings out shifty, buried feelings inside of her. Last week, we saw how she reacted around him at first. This week, we're moving ahead in the scene. Margo is about to take Emma home, but the girl is passed out from painkillers and exhaustion. Jamie offers to carry her into the car, and this is where we find them as he settles the sleeping child in the back seat and Margo reaches in from the other side to click Emma's seatbelt:


'...
Their shoulders bumped and their heads came up at the same time—mere inches separated them, and Margo made the mistake of looking into his face.

Bathed in the soft radiance of the porch lamp that spilled in through the back windshield, his features were an arresting play of light and shadows. Suddenly seeing him so up close that she could make out the errant eyelash that had fallen on his cheekbone, she froze. Her outer shell remained immobile, while inside, a storm of uncalled-for heat and yearning warred for possession of her brain and senses.

That's a living, breathing man—a handsome, sexy creature in his own right. The red-hot memo wanted to sizzle its way all through her, but she couldn't—wouldn't—allow it. ...'


Catch the rest of the amazing SSS posse here - you're in for some amazing, awesome snippets!

Hope you're all having a lovely Sunday! It's dark, rainy, & cold here - aeons away from summer weather (Can you hear me crying...? No? Okay, just as well then... *grin*)

From Mauritius with love,

Zee

56 comments:

Alix said...

'..warred for possession of her brain and senses.' Awesome six! Thank you kindly lovely Lady for all the amazing snippets you have shared. I hope you have a marvellous Christmas. Ax

J.C. Martin said...

Great tension! And I love the detail about the eyelash on his cheek!

Lisa Fox said...

Wow, that is some intense attraction!

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Alix! So sweet of you! I hope you have a lovely Christmas too XOXO

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks JC - I really wanted to show the proximity and the idea of the errant eyelash played into my mind suddenly :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol, Lisa - indeed! Will she succumb? :)

Cara Bristol said...

Beautifully descriptive. Really nice!

And, you're right. SSS is addictive.

Cherie Marks said...

Zee, such delicious description, and the tension is perfect.

Great six!

Brinda said...

This is a great selection to leave me wanting to read more!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Cara! Lol, yup, totally addictive - I need my fix every week :)

Zee Monodee said...

Aww, thanks Cherie! So nice of you!

And I also wanted to say thanks for adding my blog up in your links, on your blog - that's really sweet of you :)

XOXO

Gem Sivad said...

When the urge to merge hits, well, it's not always convenient. But-- "That's...a handsome, sexy creature..." :D

Unknown said...

Awesome hook! Love it-

Cate Masters said...

You bring your scenes to such vivid life. Excellent work!

sue said...

I too love the eyelash bit. Your attention to detial is always spot on. You have a wonderful holiday too in your paradise island :D
by the way I sent you some e mail last week - hope you got them

Joanne Stewart said...

LOVE the tension in this. Great description as well!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Brinda - then I guess my job's done! :)

Glad you could come over

Zee Monodee said...

Nope, Gem, it isn't at all! You should see how much poor Margo will be out of her depths - next SSS, which seems to be in 2012 now... Crikey! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Aww, thanks Cate! xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Sue - I always try to see my scenes in as much detail as possible, like a movie inside my head. :)

And noooo - I didn't get your email! Guess those cyber hell hounds have posted themselves at the doors of my inbox again! Gahh! Can you please send them over once more?

Hope you have a lovely holiday too - enjoy! XOXO

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Joanne!:)

Siobhan Muir / Meg Palevich said...

Hot six, Zee! I really enjoyed her sudden awareness of him. Well done. :)

sarahballance said...

Oh, yum. LOVE the arresting play of light and shadow, and also the errant eyelash. Love the whole thing, actually. Your six totally drew me in!

Guilie said...

Oooohhhh... Yes, the forbidden fruit. A sexy, living man--in the flesh. Margo's in for a wild ride, isn't she? Thanks for sharing, Zee--loved it!

Jessica K said...

Very nicely intense scene!

Jessica Subject said...

And that's the beginning of her walls crumbling down. Great six! Love this story! :)

J.M. Blackman said...

The intensity in this snippet is palpable. I loved it! Great descriptions, Zee! You've made it a lovely Sunday despite the weather!

Ana Hart said...

This is a lovely bit of writing. I love your detail, the emotion conveyed through your words, and the arresting scene you've painted for us. Great job!

And thank you for stopping by my blog today :)

Angela Guillaume said...

Ah, the errant eyelash...that had struck me even the first time I read it. This is a beautiful snippet xoxo

angelaquarles.com said...

Great description, you describe it so vividly I felt like I was there, great job!

Sadie Hart said...

Great six. LOVE that last line. I have a feeling someday she's *gonna* allow it. -grin-

Vivien Dean said...

Excellent description. Well done!

Krystal Wade said...

Love her inner turmoil! She needs to let that red, hot number out! :-)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Siobhan! Yes, all of a sudden, she's a woman, which is so out of her game plan it's actually funny to see her stumble :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Sarah - glad it was 'captivating'! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Guilie - definitely something about the lure of the forbidden, eh? :) She's in for a wild, wild ride indeed xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Jessica!

Zee Monodee said...

Jess, that's indeed the start of her fortress crumbling down! Little by little, Jamie will win her over :) XOXO

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks JM - your words are so sweet! :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you Ana! Glad you enjoyed the snippet. It was a pleasure to drop by your blog, and I'm happy you could come over :)

Zee Monodee said...

Yup Angela - I remember how this detail made you sit up the first time itself :) xoxo sis!

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you Angela! Glad you could come over! :)

Zee Monodee said...

*grin* Sadie - yes, she'll have no choice but to allow him entrance into her heart, soon in fact :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Vivien! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Krystal - she's out of her depths completely, but thankfully Jamie is there to help keep her steady :)

Sherry Gloag said...

I love the sentence '..warred for possession of her brain and senses.' too. Jam packed with tension. Great six.
Enjoy your family time.

Lucy Felthouse said...

Another fab snippet - I'm totally reading this when I'm on holiday.

Catch you in 2012! :)

gemma parkes said...

Oh hope she gives in! Happy holidays!

julihoffman said...

Very nice six sentences!!! I esp liked the detail of the eyelash on the cheek! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Sherry! I wanted to do this scene justice - hope I managed! :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Lucy - can't wait to hear your thoughts on this one XOXO

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Gemma - she'll have no choice but to give in, but she'll fight beforehand... :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you Juli! I love that detail too - seems it's been a hit with a lot of people *grin* Glad you could come over! :)

kelworthfiles said...

I love the detailed description there, the sense that for Margo, she's suddenly in a moment of stopped time that she never expected. Fantastic six! Thanks for posting.

I missed the list deadline for this week, but I did get six sentences up! http://kelworthfiles.wordpress.com/2011/12/18/six-sentence-sunday-more-from-children/

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you Kelworth! Glad you could come over :)

Yes, it was intended to be a moment suspended in time for Margo - happy that came through *grin*

E. Jamie said...

Awesome six!

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