Sunday, May 22, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

It's Sunday again! I can't wait for this day to come now, love putting out a new quip out here. Then starts the blog-trolling. I cannot tell you the amount of amazing writing I have come across the other loops that sign up for Six Sentence Sunday. I'm sure today's offerings will be spectacular as well.

If you wanna read them, check out the Six Sunday link here.

Now, today's tidbit... Remember last week, when Kelsey dropped the second bombshell, informing Stellan that the daughter he never knew he had was gone now?
Well, in the past weeks, I posted lines of dialogue. I thought I'd go back deep inside today, into what Stellan is feeling at the news.

So that the following six make sense, here's the setup: Stellan has stepped away from Kelsey, gone to the sideboard where crystal decanters are placed, and in the maelstrom of emotion swirling inside him, has taken one decanter and slammed it on the floor.

"...Kelsey flinched when the crystal shattered. She flinched. His eyes narrowed, so he saw her only through a thin slit of focus while his features hurt, contorting with anger and agony.
She should be suffering, feeling her insides tearing apart like his were ripping right now. Everything in his being felt like it was being pulled off, slammed back together with herculean force, and pulled apart again. Again and again and again..."

That's mine for today, folks! Hope you enjoyed. :)

From Mauritius with love,

Zee

28 comments:

Viviane Brentanos said...

Very emotional six. I can feel his torment.

Lisa said...

I agree, very emotional!

Liia Ann White said...

Wow, they're some powerful words

Gem Sivad said...

I can understand--grief and anger mixed together. Wow, well done.

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Viviane! I wanted his grief to come through.

Cherie Marks said...

Intense emotion. Very visual. I can feel his anger. Great SSS.

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you Lisa! I was striving for emotional. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Liia. Glad if they rang powerful. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Gem. I kept wondering what anyone would feel like if in his shoes - to know you have a child, only to see her snatched before you just as you're about to grab her. I thought he should be quite shaken with grief and anger.

Zee Monodee said...

Glad you could catch that, Cherie! Thanks.

Cate Masters said...

Emotion-packed snippet! You make us feel his sense of deep loss almost too well.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Intense emotions. And he has a right to them!

Zee Monodee said...

Aww, thanks Cate! I admit I reeled when I wrote this, because it hurt to be in his shoes. I'm glad he sounds 'real' though.

Zee Monodee said...

Exactly, Taryn! He has every right to be angry right now. :)

Annie Nicholas said...

Wonderful emotion. I could feel his pain and anger.

Zee Monodee said...

Thnaks Annie! Glad all that came across. :)

Kim said...

His pain is almost visible. I can feel it. Great six!

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Kim!

Marie Dees said...

Oh, great six!

Jessica K said...

He's angry and in pain, but also sure of himself, thinking what the other person should be feeling. A very strong character. I think I would be more disoriented than anything. Nice snippet.

Lindsay said...

Very emotional. Torment.

Sarah Grimm said...

Great combination of grief and anger! Well done!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Marie!

Zee Monodee said...

Jessica, I kept wondering how a man, a total Alpha, would react and it seemed to me he'd reel bu then pull himself together right away. That's what I wanted to push through, glad if it came across. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Yes, Lindsay - torment indeed. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you Sarah!

Jayel Kaye said...

Excellent show of emotion. Very powerful

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Jayel!

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