Sunday, May 15, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

Hey beautiful people!

Thank goodness Blogger is up and running today. Haven't been able to get on for the past couple of days and it's a huge relief to find everything working normally today.

Gotta say I'm getting addicted to posting out these little snippets for Six Sentence Sunday. Lol, no one said it gets this addictive, something you just have to do, and that you wait for every week. I hope these tidbits make you peeps happy too. :)

So, without further ado, here's today's six. Remember last week how Kelsey dropped the bombshell as to why she was back into Stellan's life? Well, here follows a snip of the conversation that follows, deep into Stellan's POV, after Kelsey has confirmed that she gave birth to their daughter. For the purpose of Six Sentences, I have tweaked it a little so the gist of the scene is conveyed.

Enjoy!


'...For eighteen years, he hadn’t known he had a child. She was a grown girl now, a young woman, who had just given birth herself to a preemie.
“Where is she?”


“Gone.”

The word was a whisper that sent pointed knife-edges to slash-dance across his spine.
“She, Sophie,” Kelsey’s voice tore on a sob, “she died.”...'


I always forget to add this, but not today - Find out more about Six Sentence Sunday here and check out all the amazing entries listed up again this week.

From Mauritius with love,

Zee

53 comments:

Graylin Fox said...

Oh my, I just teared up. Poignant and tragic.

Rebecca Royce said...

AHHHHH. Z, you can't leave us like that.

Sandy said...

Oh my gosh, Zee, that's strong writing.

Cate Masters said...

Wow, an emotion-packed snippet. Excellent job, and the last sentence really packs a punch.

Liia Ann White said...

Ugh no! Don't leave us hanging. It's so tragic, I need to know more.

Zee Monodee said...

Graylin,

Very tragic indeed. My heart goes out to Stellan every time I think of him.

Thanks for dropping by!

Zee Monodee said...

Sorry Rebecca. :) More next week, maybe?

Hugs!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Sandy! I'm working towards that aim.

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Cate! I'm glad the emotion came across.

Zee Monodee said...

Liia, more next week, I promise!

Thanks for dropping by. :)

Cherie Marks said...

Very emotional. Good SSS.

sue said...

yes it is addictive - emotional write

Carolyn Rosewood said...

Tragic! I want to read more!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Cherie!

Zee Monodee said...

Sue, I totally need my 'fix' every Sunday now, lol.

Zee Monodee said...

Carolyn, I promise to have more next week. :)

Viviane Brentanos said...

Lovely emotional filled six.

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Viviane!!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Oh, shocking. So sad for him that he never knew and now will never know his daughter. Hope he gets a chance with the granddaughter.

Sandy Nachlinger said...

Touching scene, and well written. I like the fact that Kelsey and Stellan are older. A similar situation between long-lost lovers occurs in my book!

Zee Monodee said...

Taryn, yes - it's a heartbreaker that he won't ever know his daughter. But life is about second chances too, and their grandaughter is one such opportunity.

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Sandy. Yes, both of them are older and world-wise, though they come from two different social universes. I love long-lost lovers' stories. :)

Ginger Simpson said...

A real heart-string tugger. Great six.

Gem Sivad said...

Oh, this is so sad--and what a great set up for a rekindled love story. The reader in my weeps, the author is nodding her head.

Jessica K said...

I hope he's misinterpreted, and she's not dead... Too sad!

Jayel Kaye said...

just rip my heart out and stomp all over it. That's powerful stuff

Felicia said...

How sad! I hope the implied information isn't true.

Susanna Fraser said...

Oh, how heartwrenching.

AllureVanSanz said...

Heartbreaking, tragic... a perfect nightmare--which lets you know, it's well written.

Good job.
Best,
Allure

Misa Buckley said...

Sad six :(

JoAnne Kenrick said...

Oh, Zee..how sad xx and my, my, my.. pointed knife-edges to slash-dance across his spine love that line!

diannehartsock said...

My goodness. So much sadness in a few words. Nicely done, even if it did make me cry.

Kim said...

How sad... a powerful six, indeed.

lexcade said...

That's so sad... Wow. Great six, Zee!!

Lindsay said...

Sad. To find then maybe lose. Great six

the cautionary tale said...

wow! I wanted to shake my netbook as yell NOW WHAT!

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Ginger!

Zee Monodee said...

Gem, I had to force myself to put them across this situation. I think I fell in love with Stellan at this precise moment.

Zee Monodee said...

Jessica, unfortunately it's the truth. Yes, sad indeed.

Zee Monodee said...

Jayel, it's a hard blow, innit? Anyone in his shoes would reel.

Zee Monodee said...

Felicia, unfortunately their daughter did die. Her death and its consequences are what bring them together again.

Zee Monodee said...

Susanna, it tore me up to write this scene.

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks, Allure. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Misa, my heart breaks every time I re-read this scene.

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks JoAnne. It's heartwrenching, innit? I so feel for that poor man.

Zee Monodee said...

Dianne, sorry to have me you actually cry. But yes, I wanted this scene to be gut and heart wrenching - glad it came through.

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Kim!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Lex!

Zee Monodee said...

Lindsay, exactly - his daughter was just beyond his reach for a few minutes, only to be snatched away again.

Zee Monodee said...

@the cautionary tale,

Oops! I hope the netbook is okay.:) I'll have more coming next week.

laynap said...

So sad and beautifully written. Great six, Zee!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks laynap!

Angela Guillaume said...

Your writing always makes my heart thump a little faster....so good Zee!

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